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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
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The given line graph depicts
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of the
population
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 in four different Asian areas which existed by period from 1970 to 2020,
additionally
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 with expectations for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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 it's clearly seen, that between Malaysia and Indonesia has
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 difference in
magnitude
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the magnitude
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 of
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population
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the population
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. Malaysia has the greatest value of total
population
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,
whereas
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Thailand
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 has the lowest
percentage
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 among other countries. To explore information in
details
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detail
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,
the
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apply
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Malaysia
was
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apply
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constantly increased from 1970 to 1990
on
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by
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 approximately 15
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percent
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per cent
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,
then
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 for
next
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the next
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 20 years its value was raised extremely from 44
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percent
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 to 70, but from 2010 and
further
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 the increasing keep going, but already more stable, so it would be reached value of 83 in 2040.
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However
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Thailand
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is
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has also experienced
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also
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 experienced
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a rose
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rose
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rise
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 in its
percentage
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. From
first
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the first
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 two
decades
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decades,
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 it was
slight
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a slight
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 change to
positive
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the positive
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 side in amount of
population
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 by 9 or 10
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percent
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per cent
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. Starting from 1990 the curve
was become
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became
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 more uniform and it
was lasted
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lasted
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 about 30 years.
Furthermore
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 from 2020 to 2040 by predictions
Thailand
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 must
be waited
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wait
have waited
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 for the biggest changes in its
percentage
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 of
population
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 by 20
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percent
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per cent
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.
Thus
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 in
2040
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2040,
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Thailand
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would
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will
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 be
gotten
Verb problem
receiving
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 45
present
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presents
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 at all
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, thailand, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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