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Some people think that we should publicize much information as possible, typically science, commerce and academic issue, however other opine that it is too valuable to share freely Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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 some individuals believe
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informations
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 which
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 vital,
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 as scientific, commerce
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academical
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 issues should not be made public free of charge
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 its high value, others advocate for the necessity of publicizing
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informations
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 as
they
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 may be helpful to
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society. It is essential for
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know
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 as it can sometimes save
people
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 from
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hazardous
situation
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, but at the
the
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same time,
people
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 might use these
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inaccuately
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inaccurately
 if can be reached without a
streched
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stretched
. I believe
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informations
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 should not be given out freely without a cost. On one hand, gaining insight regarding climate change and
health related
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topic
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topics
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 can be difficult and often
human
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humans
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loss
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 interest especially if it requires a price.
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, during the covid 19
pendemic
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pandemic
endemic
, most
informtions
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information
 and
guildeline
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guideline
guidelines
 made to
public
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the public
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was
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 free and it made an impact on general hygiene and knowledge of
people
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 who did not go to schools.
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, it is paramount for
information
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or
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 overuse of
information
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.
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,
people
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 tend to value
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 that
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 a fortune.
i
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 believe that all
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need
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 to be priced so that
community
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the community
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 will value the source. In conclusion, it is crucial to know about environmental situations and
health related
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topic
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 freely.
however
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, in order to avoid misconceptions and overuse of
information
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, a price
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needs
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 to be tagged.
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Expand on ideas and provide more depth to ensure a complete response to the prompt.
coherenceCohesion
Improve the logical connection between ideas to enhance the flow of the essay.
language
Use accurate language and grammar to ensure clarity and professionalism in the presentation of ideas.
taskAchievement
You have presented both sides of the debate, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
coherenceCohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, establishing a clear framework for your argument.
taskAchievement
The example of the COVID-19 pandemic is relevant and adds credibility to your discussion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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