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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport constuction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, the world has been suffering from many issues and one of them is
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that air traffic is increasing more noise,
polution
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pollution
 and airport formation.
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,
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other
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others
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argued
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 that it is growth by low-cost passenger
flights
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 often to holiday destinations.
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,other says it is
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the government
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government
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government's
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 responsibility to
declain
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reduce
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tax
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taxes
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 on
people
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. I
am agree
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given
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statement because
of
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flights
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 are more crucial for
people
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use of
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travel.
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 with, there are
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 of
reason
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 why it is vital for
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First
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 and foremost reason is
flights
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 are essential for humans. For illustration,
people
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 go
for
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abroad because of their
study
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studies
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.
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,going abroad
for
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to
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 rest and spend their time.
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also
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 I am not
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 of any type of
taxe
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taxi
 transportation. Nowadays,
mostly
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most
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people
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who
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go
for
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abroad because of their
job
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. No matter What is the reason
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People
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people
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 choose
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their own
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 like of transportation. That
it
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is our responsibility.
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, there are disadvantages of
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air traffic
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. To commence with, it
is increase
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 more amount of noise, pollution.
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, many
people
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 believe
transportation
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in transportation
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own
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car rather than
plan
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plane
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.I
am agree
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 with
this
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 point of view.
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this
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this,
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 from
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 choice. The solution is
having
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 more taxing on
people
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. If we try
people
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 taught it is beneficial
such
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 as
people
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 know their own
responsiblity
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responsibility
. In conclusion,
although
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flights
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 are vital for
people
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.
Mostly
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people
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 go
for
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abroad because of their
job
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jobs
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.
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moreover
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,spend their holiday or time with their friends. In my opinion, air traffic
is increase
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 more pollution and
that
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is solve
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 by
being
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heavy
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heavily
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taxe
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taxed
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people
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay more effectively. Present your main points in a logical sequence and ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
task achievement
Make sure to fully develop your arguments with clear ideas and strong supporting evidence. Try to include specific examples to strengthen your response.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt and briefly outlines the main issues surrounding air traffic.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and conclusion, which establishes a clear structure for your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental degradation
  • Noise pollution
  • Airborne emissions
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Aviation industry
  • Taxation measures
  • Economic ramifications
  • Regulatory framework
  • Technological advancements
  • Carbon footprint
  • Alternatives to flying
  • Government intervention
  • Green initiatives
  • Travel habits
  • Accessibility of travel
  • Fiscal deterrents
  • Consumer behavior
  • Global tourism
  • Market dynamics
  • Social equity
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