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The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below
illustrate
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 the protein and calorie
consumtion
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consumption
 in four different parts of the world .
Overall
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, there is significantly high protein and
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calories
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calorie
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intake
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 in North
America
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while
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 India
fall
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 the lowest. Latin
America
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has
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the
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apply
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consume
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 half of
the
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North
America
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while
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 East Africa
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is sligtly
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sligtly
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slightly
 lower than Latin
America
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. First of all, North
America
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 has the highest protein and calorie
in take
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intake
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 with
average
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an average
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 of 80 for
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protien
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protein
 62 for
animal
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animals
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and
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apply
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18 other
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protien
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proteins
, and 3500
calories
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. The second highest is Latin
America
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 which
consum
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consumes
 32 of animal
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protien
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protein
 and 13 of other
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protien
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protein
 sources with
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overall
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an overall
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of
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45 of
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protien
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protein
intake
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 ,
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however
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however,
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 the average
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calories
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calorie
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intake
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 is around 2800
calorie
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calories
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.
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 , the 2 least in
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protien
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protein
 and
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calories
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calorie
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intake
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 are East Africa and India
whic
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which
 both did not
consum
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consume
average
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an average
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 higher than 32 of the
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protien
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protein
 and 2100 for
calories
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this
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considered
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is considered
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 the lowest in
comparsion
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comparison
 with other countries .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, intake, america, protien with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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