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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Anel

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Anel
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The illustrations display data about police
budget
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budgets
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 for two years in
a
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an
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 area of
UK
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the UK
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. The table presents where the money came
and
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from and
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 the charts show how
rhe
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the
 money was spent. The units
measured
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are measured
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 in
million
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millions
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 and
persentage
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percentages
.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it's
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it
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seem
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seems
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 that the all
sources
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source's
sources'
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 police budget was in
a
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apply
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stability in
following
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the following
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 two years.
Linking Words
However
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However,
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 in the chart officers and
staff's
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staff
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 made up the biggest part of the
spendings
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spending
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. In
table
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the table
a table
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, the
sourse
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source
course
 National
Goverment
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Government
 accounted for 175.5
m
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 and it slightly rose, in the next year to 177.8
m
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 local taxes, increased from 91.2
m
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 to 102.3m other sources increased only to 5 million, in the total, budget grow up in 14
milion
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million
 in two years. In
pie
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the pie
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 charts,
while
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 employee's
salary
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salaries
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 decreased by 6% and accounted
69
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for 69
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%, building and transport had no change. The technology category experienced
slightly
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slight
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 growth to 14%
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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