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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Nur

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Nur
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The multiple graph below illustrates information about the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one region of the UK.
Overall
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, the table shows where the money
come
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comes
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 from and the charts show how it was distributed.
Furthermore
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, both of them had three categories. In table, demonstrates from where the money came. There are three classes
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 National Government, Local Taxes and other Sources. In
this
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 period,
National
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the National
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 Government had
big
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a big
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 income
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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from
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to
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 others.
Moreover
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, all of
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 sources increased from
2017
Correct article usage
the 2017
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 value.
On the other hand
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,
chart
Correct article usage
the chart
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 describes how it was distributed. In there,
also
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same
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the same
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 number of categories as
table
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the table
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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 Salary, Technology and building and transport.
Furthermore
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,
pie
Correct article usage
the pie
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 chart gave information in
percentage
Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
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. In 2017, salaries which officers and staff had the highest proportion and it was three-quarters. In 2018, again salary was
biggest
Correct article usage
the biggest
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 in
pie
Add an article
a pie
the pie
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 chart. It was above seven in ten.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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