Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects, so some people think that it should not be a compulsory subject at high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects, so some people think that it should not be a compulsory subject at high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?