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Band 5.5

Write a letter to a sports club. Tell them you are not satisfied with the service and have already let them know about this. Write ▪What exactly wrong with their service ▪What happened after you complained the first time ▪What you want the club to do after your letter

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Hi Team, I'm writing
this
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 email to complain about the service in the
sport
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sports
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 club.
I'm
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I've been
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the
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a
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 member of
this
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 club
since
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for
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 two years. I usually come to
this
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 club on the weekend with my friend to swim in the swimming pool. Recently, I got interested
to join
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in joining
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 the
badmintion
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badminton
class
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, paid the entry fees and enrolled
into
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on
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 the
class
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. But, unfortunately, I'm not happy with the service
especially
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, especially
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 with the
trainer
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. My
class
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allocated
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is allocated
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in
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to
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 the evening
class
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,
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however
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however,
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 there are many people in
this
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 particular session and
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trainer
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the trainer
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 is not able to provide equal training to all the candidates. Whenever
i
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I
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 raise the question to
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trainer
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a trainer
the trainer
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 about technique, there is
delay
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a delay
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 in response and during
training
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a training
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 session,
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trainer
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the trainer
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not
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is not
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 able to proper training to me. Now I
had
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have
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self doubt
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self-doubt
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 whether
its
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it's
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 worth
to spend
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spending
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 the money with
same
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the same
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trainer
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 to get
expert
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an expert
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 in badminton. I've already informed
to
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apply
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the
recepition
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reception
 desk about
this
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 issue
last
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 week
,
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 since there's no action taken by them Kindly take appropriate action to address my concern by allocating
equal
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an equal
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 amount of
trainee
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trainees
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 in the
badmintion
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badminton
 training session and
then
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 find the valuable resource who can help us to get
expert
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an expert
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 in badminton. Thanks and Regards Dhivya
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general
Improve sentence structure for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Break down longer paragraphs into smaller ones for better readability.
task achievement
Provide more specific suggestions for improvements.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear opening and closing.
task achievement
The issue is clearly stated.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a specific point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsatisfactory
  • maintenance
  • equipment
  • customer service
  • resolve
  • complaint
  • acknowledged
  • immediate action
  • compensation
  • inconvenience
  • disregarded
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