The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
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per 1000-population at hospitals in Northern Ireland divided by age groups in December
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2016 and 2017.
Overall
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, the graph shows that the clusters
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the oldest and youngest ages were the ones that assisted the most.
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, we can see that between both years has increased the
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at the emergency hospital.
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, the age group that went the least to the emergency service were those
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who had between five and fifteen.
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, the clusters aged 5-15, 16-44, 45-64 and 65-74 do not have a big difference in terms of how many of them avail the emergency services of the Northern Ireland hospitals. After taking all the details, we can conclude that the younger and the oldest persons in Northern Ireland are the ones that have
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urgencies and emergencies
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and that those who had between five to 74
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assisted
the least.
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