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Band 6.5

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. SA

The maps below show an industrial
area
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 in the town of Norbiton
,
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apply
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 and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
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,the road is completely changed, meanwhile
river
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the river
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 and town will stay the same. Currently, there are some factories
in
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on
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 the eastern
side
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.In the
future
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future,
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 it will be converted into
housing
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a housing
the housing
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area
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. It will be set up from industrial to residential
area
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. At the moment , there are 8 industrial factories
in
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on
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 the eastern
side
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 River is following from direction east-west
side
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 next to the Farmland. There is a town
in
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on
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 the western
side
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 of the map. There is a roundabout in the
center
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centre
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 of
map
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the map
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. Road and highway are following the roundabout to the right
side
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.
However
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 ,in the
future
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future,
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 it will
set
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be set
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 up from industrial to residential
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area
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areas
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. There will be some housing facing to North-West and East-South
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area
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areas
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. And one house will be built
in
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on
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 the other
side
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 of the river. There are large addictions,
such
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 as
playgroud
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playground
,
school
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schools
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, medical
centre
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centres
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 and
shop
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shops
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.The new path will be developed beside the farmland. A path will be constructed over the water flow.A new
rounabout
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roundabout
wil
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will
 be constructed next to the medical centre.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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