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Artificial intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statment ? What is an alternative to traditional face to face teaching?

#intelligence #teachers #classroom #statment #alternative #face
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, robotics started to take a bigger place in our lives and that's including schools and thinking of using artificial intelligence
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 of humans.   In my
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 their jobs Technology is taking a bigger role
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 our lives, and
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 in a negative way
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teaching, the idea of starting
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teaching in the classroom with robotics is totally unfair. That's because
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 the academic path will be laid
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. The companies
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 into that from the angle of money and
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 will be cheaper.
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, the employees who are working in the
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 have been replaced by robots as in
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, solutions are in our hands to please the companies and at the same time to save the
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 jobs.
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 the classes online to make it possible for the companies to save the bell's money and pay the salary for the employees. In conclusion,
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intelligence
 is the future, i don't agree
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 take a big place to the
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 that affects
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humans.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Supplementary tool
  • Repetitive tasks
  • Personalized learning experiences
  • Tailored lessons
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Rapport
  • Motivation
  • Engagement
  • Social interaction
  • Blended learning
  • Online educational tools
  • Remote learning platforms
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Flexibility
  • Diverse courses
  • Geographical locations
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