The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010.
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The line graph illustrates how many memberships were bought by different genders between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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, the results are very randomly distributed, as there is a low correlation between these two groups. To start with, at the beginning of the observing period, the number of male cards registered peaked at just above 4000 units for the first group and only about 2000 for the latter.
Then
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, women started acquiring more sports services, until it caught up with another gender in the 1990s.
Besides
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, in 1995, females reached their peak,
while
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gentlemen`s sports purchases decreased to 1800 only. In the new century, the situation one more time changed because the male rate collapsed,
while
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women's memberships kept fluctuating between 1900 and 3000 units. Interestingly, in 2005, 5000 fitness cards were purchased by men, making up the maximum of the period.
However
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, just after that, the indication sharply decreased to historical minimums by 2010.
Thus
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,
although
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firstly
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men were primary gym users, by 2010 women's membership accounted for just under 2000 units and men's was close to 1000.
To sum up
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, gentlemen's results fluctuated more than another gender's.
However
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,
while
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the greatest amount of time male cards prevailed over females, the situation is the opposite in the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Vertical axis
  • Horizontal axis
  • Gym membership
  • Male and female
  • Trends
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Peak / Drop
  • Comparison
  • Equality / Inequality
  • Period / Time-frame
  • Cultural shifts
  • Health awareness
  • Economic factors
  • Target market
  • Marketing strategies
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