Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while other believe that it is better to straight after school. Discuss both views and give you opinion.
There is no denying the fact that
successful
career requires a lot of knowledge and effort to be achieved. Correct article usage
a successful
While
it is a commonly held belief that learning from university or college is Linking Words
best
path Change the article
the best
for
success, there is Change preposition
to
also
an argument that opposes it. Linking Words
This
essay will analyse both views and Linking Words
gives
my opinion.
On one hand, university or any other learning system Correct subject-verb agreement
give
enhance
Change the verb form
enhances
student's
personality in many aspects. Correct article usage
a student's
In other
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words
the roles that students are following are teaching them the Add a comma
words,
discepline
and time Correct your spelling
discipline
manegment
. Correct your spelling
management
In addition
, these skills are crucial in Linking Words
job
market because of their importance. Add an article
the job
For instance
, successful employees are very strict Linking Words
in
time Change preposition
with
manegments
and Correct your spelling
management
managements
the
dates, which always makes them Correct article usage
apply
to
better than their unlearners Change preposition
apply
collegues
.
Correct your spelling
colleagues
On the other hand
, Linking Words
other
think that going to Fix the agreement mistake
others
job
market after school might make Add an article
the job
a huge shortcuts
in their successful career, and Correct the article-noun agreement
a huge shortcut
huge shortcuts
also
that professional life is something Linking Words
is
learned by working not studying. It is Correct pronoun usage
that is
also
possible to say Linking Words
colleges
takes four to five years Fix the agreement mistake
college
from
your Change preposition
of
live
before you start working and in these years provide Replace the word
life
theritical
knowledge. Correct your spelling
theoretical
Furthermore
, working from Linking Words
early
age might improve the person's skills Add an article
an early
to fast
by being close Verb problem
quickly
with
experienced people and knowing what is new in Change preposition
to
job
market. Add an article
the job
For example
, Linking Words
worker
with four years Correct article usage
a worker
experience
is better than Change preposition
of experience
certified
person with no experience.
In conclusion, there is no easy answer Add an article
a certified
the certified
for
Change preposition
to
this
question. On balance, I tend to believe that schooling Linking Words
at
any learning system is better Change preposition
in
to have
Change preposition
for having
successful
career Add an article
a successful
because of
many reasons Change preposition
for
such
as knowledge that includes and Linking Words
person
personality development in many life aspects.Change noun form
person's
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