The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some
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think that the menace of nuclear weapons keeps world peace. Nuclear power gives inexpensive and clean energy. I disagree
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era, most
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feel that
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of nuclear arms
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world peace. Nuclear power provides generous and clean energy.
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statement is misleading because there are a
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disadvantages
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, nuclear can cause mass
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incident in Hiroshima that
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killed a
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impact
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killed. So,
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impact
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is very hazardous to anybody that
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exposured
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beacuse
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because
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, nuclear can lead
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environment
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because
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exposed
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nuclear.
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is because water and ground will be contaminated with
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radioactive
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uninhabitable
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zone because of that.
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could not be utilized for several months because the water and ground
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contaminated
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of nuclear.
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humans
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environment
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. In conclusion, there are a
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of
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drawbacks
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from
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nuclear.
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, nuclear can lead
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deaths
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because when everyone is
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exposed
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nuclear
impact
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,
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, most
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will experience
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deaths
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.
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, nuclear can
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cause
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environment
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become
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damaged.
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task achievement
Ensure that you clearly outline your stance (disagreement) in the introduction and provide a brief outline of the main points you will discuss.
relevant specific examples
Introduce more specific examples or data to strengthen your argument. The Hiroshima example is good, but consider adding examples of nuclear energy's impact or positive aspects as well.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between your ideas to enhance flow. Transition words and phrases can help guide the reader through your argument.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively communicate your position on the topic.
supported main points
The essay includes relevant points, outlining significant disadvantages of nuclear weapons and power.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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