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The chart and table illustrate the time spent by men and women on various household activities, excluding paid work, in the UK in 2008.

The chart and table illustrate the time spent by men and women on various household activities, excluding paid work, in the UK in 2008.
According to
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 the table,
men
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 spent more
time
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 than
women
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 on leisure activities
such
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 as watching TV, videos, and listening to the radio, with
men
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 averaging 137
minutes
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 per
day
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 compared to 118
minutes
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 for
women
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.
This
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 indicates that
men
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 had more
time
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 for relaxation.
However
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, both genders dedicated nearly the same amount of
time
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 to reading books.
Men
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 participated in sports for 15
minutes
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 per
day
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, slightly more than the 11
minutes
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 spent by
women
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. As shown in the chart,
women
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 devoted more than double the
time
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 to cooking and washing compared to
men
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, with
women
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 spending over 75
minutes
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 per
day
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,
while
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men
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 spent only 30
minutes
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.
Women
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also
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 spent more
time
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 shopping, averaging 35
minutes
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 per
day
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, compared to 25
minutes
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 for
men
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.
Furthermore
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,
women
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 spent twice as much
time
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 washing clothes and ironing, at 30
minutes
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 per
day
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, compared to just 10
minutes
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 for
men
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.
On the other hand
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,
men
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 spent twice as much
time
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 on repairs as
women
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.
Overall
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, the data reveals that
women
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 spent significantly more
time
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 on household activities than
men
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 in the UK in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, time, women, minutes, day with synonyms.
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