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25DEC The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

25DEC The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the proportion of people aged 15 to 24 who were unemployed and compared to
overall
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unemployment
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this
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 survey included five different European countries in 2005.
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, the proportion of Polandia population who did not work showed the highest opposed to that of Denmark. Looking in more detail, The
unemployment
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rate
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 of Polish aged 15-24 was approximately 35%, about 5% higher than that of
overall
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unemployment
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 and makes it the highest among all countries. Interestingly, there was the same
rate
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 between the percentage of
overall
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unemployment
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 in Polandia and that of the 15-24 age jobless group in Italy, at 28%.
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 the
rate
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 of the whole joblessness in Italy halved.
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, Hungary's share
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 revealed a similar pattern with Italy where jobless in certain ages more than half (23%) of
overall
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 joblessness (12%).
In contrast
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, Denmark recorded the lowest
rate
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 of
population
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the population
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 aged 15-24 who were unpaid
as well as
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 the
overall
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unemployment
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rate
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, recording at 12% and 8%, respectively. Germany,
on the other hand
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, had a narrow gap between both categories with the 15-24 age group led by 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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