Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

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Hello MR Osama , I hope you are doing well . I recently got a new
jop
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job
finally
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,
I
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and I
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would like to share it with you . In the beginning , I am interested
to get
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in getting
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different experiences , Because , my ambition is CEO ,
Therefore
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I should work in Accountant , Finance and
another department
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other departments
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. My
last
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job was accountant ,
However
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, Now I
got
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have
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an opportunity in the finance department . My job is Financial Analyst , I am looking for chances to invest . I remember you
also
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working in finance ,But , I forgot which company .The
last
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news I have got
it
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is I have
been
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known my girlfriend for six years
also
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now
finally
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we are going to get married
in
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next month ,
Therefore
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, You have to come to my wedding , I will not be able to accept any
apologise
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apologies
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. Thank you , I am looking forward to hearing back from you . Best regard Niaf Altimime
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly into separate paragraphs to improve readability. For example, dedicate one paragraph to your job change, another to describing your new job, and another to your personal news.
coherence cohesion
Try to use linking words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'therefore' more purposefully to improve the logical flow of your letter.
task achievement
You have successfully covered all parts of the task by explaining your reason for changing jobs, describing your new job role, and sharing personal news.
task achievement
The tone of your letter remains friendly and informal, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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