Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts?

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Nowadays, we are connected through a variety of

media

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channels like

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movies, series and newspapers. Because of that reason, many local

cultures

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and traditions are disappearing

itself

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. I strongly

consider

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believe

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that international

media

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affecting

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our local

culture

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very badly. In

this

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essay, I will talk about how

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is going in the wrong direction.

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with, young adults who were born with technology,

they

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never

known

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their traditions and

cultures

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due to

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international

media

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. These days, young individuals don'

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really focus on their

tradiotions

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traditions

they think traditional things are not appropriate for them and follow other

cultures

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because young people find many

cultures

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attractive to them.

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, many students in Bangladesh don'

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know much about their

cultures

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, they mostly follow

western

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culture

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rather than their own.

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, they celebrate many international events

instead

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of their own events

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media

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attraction.

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, fashion has changed a lot in recent years because many people see movie stars wearing

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suit

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, so they

influenced

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by that, and change their clothing and fashion styles as well, which isn'

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appropriate for their

culture

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, if that continues the

culture

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might disappear one day without any trace.

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traditional city named "Rora", female people

were

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used to wear traditional clothes which

was

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"Saree" but now

that

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country's women

follows

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western

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cultures

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, they wear jeans pants, short dresses and other inappropriate dress codes.

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, they

forgot

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how to wear a Saree and don'

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want to learn how to wear it, so that's how a

culture

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vanished from a country. In conclusion, traditions and

cultures

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were harmed by many international social

media

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, films and other

media

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and it has a dynamic impact on young youth

due to

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the attraction and influence they provide.

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, young youth follow other country's

cultures

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rather than their own tradition. In my opinion,

advantages

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the advantages

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of these effects

doesn'

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outweigh

disadvantages

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the disadvantages

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task response

Try to provide more concrete examples and evidence to support your points. For instance, use studies or statistics to back up claims about cultural influence.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph expands on a single idea or theme. This will improve paragraph cohesion and help your argument flow more smoothly.

task response

The essay presents a clear opinion and maintains this stance consistently throughout the text.

coherence and cohesion

The structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs with examples, and a conclusion, enhancing readability and coherence.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

314 words

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Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts?

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