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The chart below shows the protein and calorie intake of people in different parts of the world.

The chart below shows the protein and calorie intake of people in different parts of the world.
The charts illustrate an overview of average
consumption
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 levels of both
protein
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 and
calories
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 in four different countries, including India, East
Africa
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,
Latin
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America
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, and North
America
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.
Overall
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, North
America
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 exhibits the highest average
intake
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 of both
protein
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 and
calories
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 among the four regions.
According to
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 the average
protein
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consumption
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, Indians consume 28
units
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, compared to 31
units
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 in East
Africa
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 and 35
units
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 in
Latin
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America
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.
In contrast
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, North
America
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's average
protein
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intake
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 significantly surpasses the ideal level, reaching 80
units
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.
Furthermore
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, the
consumption
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 of animal-derived
protein
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 in India and East
Africa
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 is nearly identical, at 13 and 16
units
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, respectively. In both
Latin
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America
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 and North
America
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,
however
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, the figures are considerably higher, at 32
units
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 and 62
units
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, respectively. Regarding the average calorie
intake
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, India records the lowest
consumption
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, at only 2,000
calories
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, which is lower than the approximately 2,500
calories
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 consumed in East
Africa
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. In
Latin
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America
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, the average calorie
consumption
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 is close to the ideal amount, at roughly 2,900
calories
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.
Nevertheless
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, North
America
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's average calorie
intake
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 exceeds the ideal amount, at about 3,500
calories
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, surpassing it by nearly 500
calories
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, protein, calories, africa, latin, america, intake, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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