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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the
number
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 of international students who applied to certain universities in one European country from 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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, Chinese applicants showed a decreasing trend
while
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that
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apply
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of
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apply
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American
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Americans
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 recorded the opposite trend.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of applicants from Japan and Russia remained relatively stable over the years. Looking in more detail, in 2004, about 25000
of
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apply
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prospective international students from China
who
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apply
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pursued study
to
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at
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 the universities of
specific
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a specific
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 European country.
However
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,
this
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number
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 tended to decline every year, dropping by 10,000 to reach 15,000 in 2008. Interestingly, from 2004 to 2007, Japanese enthusiasts who wanted to study in Europe continued to constant at 6000
,
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apply
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 but increased to 10000 in the
last
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 period.
Similarly
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 to Japan,
Russian
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the Russian
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 population who pursued
education
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an education
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 in one European country experienced modest stability, accounting
less
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for less
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 than 3000 people and representing the smallest figure throughout the period.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of American applicants soared, beginning at
arounf
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around
 15,000 in 2004 and continuing to climb steadily, reaching over 25000 by 2008.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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