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Band 3

In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is debate over where
people
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 should
work
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, with some saying in
few
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a few
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 countries
people
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 can
work
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 without leaving
home
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 and others arguing
workers
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 should still
coming
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come
be coming
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 to the
office
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. In my opinion,
while
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 working at
home
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have
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 some benefits,
office
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work
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 produces good results. In some countries, companies
giving
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are given
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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work
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to work
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 without leaving
home
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.
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Work
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Working
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 at
home
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give
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gives
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people
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 a lot of chances, when
people
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work
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 at
home
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 they won't have a
work
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 schedule.
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Also
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 they can
work
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 whenever they want. As an
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example,
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people
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work
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editors
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as editors
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 for bloggers. They should edit a video in 3 days.
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However
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 not all jobs can provide the opportunity to
work
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 from
home
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 In other countries,
workers
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 still come to the
office
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. Сoming to
work
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 in the
office
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big
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has big
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 advantages for employers, they will be able to observe the
work
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 process and can correct or praise
workers
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for example
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workers
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 of large companies like BMW cannot give the opportunity to
work
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 from
home
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. Because if
workers
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 do not show
people
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 cars they will not buy them and
this
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 will affect the success of the company In conclusion, working from
home
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 is a convenient way for many, but by coming to
work
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 in the
office
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, employers can manage and achieve good results

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader through your main points.
task achievement
Make sure to use standard expressions like 'working from home' instead of phrases like 'work without leaving home' for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious of grammatical errors such as verb tenses and plural forms, which can affect understanding.
task achievement
You provide a well-balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main point about the benefits of office work.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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