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Band 3.5

Did environments I'll be coming and healthy suggest causes and solutions

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Nowadays a lot of people are moving to cities and
overpopulation
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the overpopulation
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 of big cities is gradually increasing. The deterioration of the urban environment can be linked to urbanization, social processes and the economy. One of the main problems (problems) is air pollution. The use of transport, which causes more traffic jams and emissions from factories not only
worsen
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worsens
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 the quality of the environment, but
also
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 affects the health of citizens. The next problem is
dense
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the dense
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 population. People from small towns move to large ones in order to develop themselves which leads to hectic
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, expensive housing and
lack
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a lack
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 of green spaces. The government should take
the
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apply
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measures to tackle
with
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this
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 serious problem. The development of public transport
such
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 as the subway and buses will help reduce the number of cars on the road, which will reduce emissions of pollutants and reduce traffic jams. Аso, in order to
alevate
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elevate
alleviate
 the situation it is worth creating effective systems for sorting, recycling and recycling
of
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waste In conclusion, the combination of these measures with the help of the government and the active participation of local people will help to significantly improve the urban environment and improve the quality of life in cities.

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Ensure consistency in verb forms and improve sentence structures for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use transitions more effectively to connect ideas and paragraphs fluidly.
introduction conclusion present
The essay introduces the topic adequately and provides a conclusion that summarizes the points effectively.
logical structure
Main ideas are clear and logical structure is maintained throughout the essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses the problems and suggests practical solutions clearly.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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