*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. *Why might this be the case? *What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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There are a number of humans choosing
self-employment
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over working in
the
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company
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or organisation. I believe the reason
to
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that is
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perspective
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the perspective
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of a higher
income
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.
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, inconsistency in
income
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and relying only on yourself are the drawbacks of
self-employment
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. I think
prospect
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of a high
income
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is a prime incentive that inclines people to choose
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.
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working in an organisation
garantees
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guarantees
you a stable salary, it is quite hard to make more money just by working in
one
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position. If a worker would like to increase his salary that usually would be possible by upgrading to a higher position. As an example, Apple
company
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employees working as
a
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sales associates in Canada are earning 20 to 30
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dollars for an hour,
while
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store managers are making around 40
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dollars for an hour. First and foremost, inconsistent
income
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will be
one
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of the risks for a person deciding to work for himself. Companies
are
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usually
paying
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the same salary depending on
hours
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the hours
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you
worked
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, but with
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self-employment
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self-employment,
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your
income
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can vary from to.
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, a freelance beginner model in
USA
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the USA
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can find
a
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several
compain
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company
complain
projects
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one
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month and make about 1000 dollars, but later there is no
garantee
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guarantee
of available projects for the next month. Another drawback of
self-employment
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is that workers can only rely on themself. If in the
company
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you have a number of team members
that
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who
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are able to support or help with the deadlines, here you only have yourself and all of the work and results entirely
depends
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depend
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on you, which can be very overwhelming. To illustrate, an
animaton
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animation
studio in Japan called Gibli has a team of animators, working on
production
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the production
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of
a
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one
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scene.
But
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if a self-employed animator approaches the project, it would take much more time and effort because he would have to do it alone.
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, the main cause of
rising
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the rising
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number of workers choosing
self-employment
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rather
working
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than working
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for a
company
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is a belief that they will be earning
better
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a better
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income
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.
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, some disadvantages of that
inclusde
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include
unstable
income
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and having no
one
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to rely on apart from yourself when it comes to approaching any kind of
jobs
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job
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.
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