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Band 3.5

Your English speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celbrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how important New Year is to people in your country -describe how New Year is celebrated in your country -explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear Angga
Hello
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Hello,
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 bro Are you
good
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well
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 me
arga
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area
, for
the
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apply
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your college project,
i
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I
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 have some
story
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stories
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 for
celebrate
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celebrating
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 in my country as a
muslim
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Muslim
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,in one year,
its
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it is
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call
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called
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eid
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Eid Mubarok
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mubarok
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Mubarak
,and many
food
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foods
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 at my home,like
a
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apply
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Rendang and
opor
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poor
, after
eat
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eating
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,we meet all
family
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the family
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 door to door,handshake and give money
for
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to
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child
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the child
a child
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, so
i
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I
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 really
enjoy
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enjoyed
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at
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apply
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that moment,because all
family
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the family
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together
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was together
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at
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for
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 one or two
day
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days
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, oke
i
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I
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 hope
this
Linking Words
 can help your project angga,keep
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healthy
healty
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healthy
,and
i
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I
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 hope
you
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your
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 project
succesed
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succeed
success
good bye
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goodbye
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 Angga your Brother Arga

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to structure your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea.
Task Achievement
Try to elaborate more on how New Year is celebrated and its importance, to give a fuller picture.
Suitable Writing Tone
The letter conveys a friendly and positive tone, suitable for writing to a friend.
Complete Response
The message reflects personal experiences and cultural insights, which are interesting for the reader.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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