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In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is very important for people. Topic: house and accomodation + property Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some regions,
acquairing
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acquiring
 a permanent settlement is more
prefereable
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preferable
 rather than renting one. I believe
this
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condition
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have
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 more negative impacts rather than
the
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apply
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positives, and
this
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 essay will elaborate
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this topics
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.
Firstly
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, buying a property is quite a difficult thing to do
that
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because
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 not all people
could
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can
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 afford it, especially in certain regions
such
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 as in
an
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urban
area
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areas
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 where the price of land and
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house
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houses
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 is more expensive
due to
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its
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limited space. 
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, buying a
house
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 without a robust financial
condition
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 could lead to a dangerous financial
condition
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 in the future if you cannot manage your expenses well after you
bought
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buy
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 your
house
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.
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, some people could have financial
problem
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problems
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 or even bankruptcy because they could not afford their
long-tem
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long-term
 mortgage after they experience a shock in their career. The second negative impact of owning a
house
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 is that it could limit your flexibility to adapt. If you have a
house
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 in
certain
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a certain
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 city or area, you cannot move easily if you have a better job opportunity in another city.
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, when a person
face
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 a lay-off situation, they cannot seek
for
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another job in
other area
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another area
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simpy
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simply
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 because they already
owning
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own
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 a
house
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 in their hometown.
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 you could sell your
house
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, it is not as easy
at
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as
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 it seems, since selling your property usually takes a
while
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. In conclusion, I believe all these
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condition
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conditions
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 made renting your settlement
is
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more beneficial and important rather than buying one. Even if your bank account gives you the possibility of owning a permanent settlement, I believe the inflexibility that it
imposed
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imposes
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 on your life could
limiting
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limit
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 your ability to adapt to your current
situtation
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situation
.

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language
Consider reviewing for minor grammatical errors and word choice, such as 'acquairing' instead of 'acquiring' and 'preferable' instead of 'prefereable'. This will help in improving the clarity and accuracy of the essay.
task response
Ensure that all ideas presented are fully developed. For instance, the advantages of renting versus buying could be explored more deeply with additional examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring that each main point is clearly linked to the essay question and develops the argument effectively throughout.
task response
The essay features a clear introduction and conclusion that outlines the writer's perspective on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
A structured approach is taken with the paragraphing, separating ideas about financial challenges and flexibility issues related to owning a home.
task response
Use of specific examples, such as the risk of financial instability and job flexibility issues, contributes well to illustrating the points discussed.
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