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The pie charts illustrate the number of people speak in foreign languages in one University of England in 2000 and 2010 make relevant comparisons

The pie charts illustrate the number of people speak in foreign languages in one University of England in 2000 and 2010 make relevant comparisons
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The given pie charts illustrate the
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of students from Great Britain at an English university who knew more than only English, in 2000 and 2010.
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, after one decade the situation changed. Some of the proportion increased and some of them decreased. The most noticeable difference was that the proportion of people who did not know
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languagedecreased
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language decreased
 twice , having 20% in 2000 and 10% in 2010.
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, the number of British people who were able to speak only French declined by 5%, it was 15% in 2000 and became 10%. As
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can be seen, the
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 of German speakers did not have any changes, it stayed at 10%. The
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 of students who were able to speak only Spanish grew by 5%, so it composed
three tenths
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 of the whole pie chart in 2000 and it became 35% in 2010.
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, the same trend was noticed in
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. The proportion of people who knew another language was 15% and became 20%, the difference between the years was 5%. After one decade the number of humans who could speak 2 other languages had a rise of 5%, it consisted of 10% in 2000 and 15% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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