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With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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The high divorce
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, nowadays, is
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 many causes and hidden reasons.
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 doubt, addressing these issues
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 a multifaceted approach. In
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 I will outline some key causes and, what I believe,
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 solutions. My firm conviction is that one of the main sources is changing social norms, where greater acceptance of divorce occurs and a shift in attitude toward marriage and family structure acceptance. There are, as well,
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economic factors
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 as unemployment, financial instability, and lack of money management which, often
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 to disagreement.
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,
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 can launch an uncontrolled escalation and misunderstanding
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 unresolved conflict. Not to forget, that the absence of effective communication is crucial for any relationship. The loss of trust creates
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 issues, making it difficult for couples to continue their relationship. The emergence of technology and social media can create jealousy and deter love and mutual understanding. I believe the solution can be summarized in
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 points.
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society must encourage couples to engage in pre-marital consulting which helps them to discuss
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 and communication styles. Any proactive strides can lay a solid foundation for their marriage. Providing resources for financial planning can help in spending and reduce everyday stressors in the mirage. Encouraging regular emotional connection and prioritizing time together fosters intimacy and
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 bonds. In conclusion, the increase of divorce rate is a complex issue
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 by various social, economic, and personal factors. By understanding those factors couples and communities can work toward fostering healthier
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relationships
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 and navigate the challenges of marriage.

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The essay has a clear structure with a strong introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion and summarizing the main points.
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You have successfully identified several key causes of higher divorce rates and provided viable solutions, showing a comprehensive understanding of the issue.
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The language used is appropriate for an academic essay, with a good range of vocabulary that enhances the overall clarity of the arguments presented.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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