The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years
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The two pie charts illustrate the amount of
energy
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produced by five distinct
energy
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sources
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in France in the years 1995 and 2005, percentage-wise.
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it is evident that coal and gas accounted for more than half of the total
energy
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production in both years
while
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other
sources
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produced the least amount of
energy
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. Despite that, it is observed that nuclear power and other
sources
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nearly doubled in the 10 years from 1995 and 2005. In 1995, Coal was the leading
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producer followed by Gas and Petrol with 29.80 per
cent
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, 29.63 per
cent
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and 29.27 per
cent
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respectively.
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, nuclear power and other
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contributed to only 6.4 % and 4.9 per
cent
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of the total
energy
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produced in France in 1995. 2005 saw a few notable changes in the
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-producing market, with coal and gas rising marginally to about 30.93 % and 30.31 per
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respectively
while
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nuclear and other
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jumped to nearly double with 10.10 and 9.10 per
cent
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respectively. Petrol
in contrast
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saw a decline, occupying only about 19.5 percent of the
overall
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energy
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produced in France by 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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