The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the information about the
number
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of
visitors
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, categorized into three groups, adult
visitors
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,
visitors
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aged under 15 and special exhibition
visitors
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, who visited the
museum
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between 1997 and 2012.
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,
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the
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first glance, it becomes evident that
,
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the most significant
number
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of
visitors
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who went to
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the museum
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museum
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during these years,
was
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adults.
Although
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visitors
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aged under 15 showed
a
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noticeable participation,
prticulary
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particularly
at the
begining
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beginning
of the period, special exhibition
visitors
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contained the lowest average of participation.
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, in 1997,
while
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a bit more than 300,000 adult
visitors
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visited the
museum
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, only 28,000 special
exhibitition
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exhibition
visitors
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went to
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museum
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the museum
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.
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, after 5
yeras
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years
, the figure exhibited almost the same average of participation. It is noticeable that
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, in 2007, the highest
number
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of adults visited the
museum
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,
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400,500 people, in 2012, it decreased slightly, reaching 380,000.
Convercely
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,
while
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the
number
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of special
exhibitation
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exhibitions
visitors
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increased significantly over these
mantioned
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mentioned
years, rising from 28,000 in 1997, to 42000 by the end of the period, the
number
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of
visitors
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aged under 15, declined dramatically, starting at 120,000, ending at 82,300 in 2012.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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