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Topic 3: the best way to resolve significant environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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First of all, environmental issues
sort
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 out in
excellent
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 way by increasing the price of fuel .In my opinion, disagree with
statement
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the statement
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 the
nature
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 world will be fixable by reducing
of
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fuel
furthermore
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 ,it's
money consuming
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.
In
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 one hand , solving environmental problems can be by lowering
number
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a number
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 of
car
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 using one car for every house like quarantine when
covid
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 hit the world people
stop
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 using
car
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 the
air
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 was clear
.
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, planting trees around the streets to
decreasing
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carbon daxide and increase
oxygen
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 supply.
also
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, preferably using electric cars will be environmentally friendly
like
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:tesla is an electric
cars
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use
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 only electricity to drive it can
be charges
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 in
home
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the home
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 or electric station .importantly breathing
a
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 fresh nice
air
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 is desirable.
In
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 the other,riding a bike as transportation can be
benefit
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 for health and environmentally friendly
.
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Additionally
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,
quiting
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quitting
cigarettes
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cigarette
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 smoke
rise
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the carbon daxide inside the
air
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 and stoping smoking great for your body
for example
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in
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 recent studies found that 75%of individuals who
quite
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quit
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 smoking during one week the weather was clear . Using physical activities is enjoyable
carbon
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and carbon
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daxide free
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dioxide-free
. In conclusion ,
Nature
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the natural
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 world
need
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 people to be more responsible and strict by dropping
number
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a number
the number
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 of cars using bicycles planting trees and
stop
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stopping
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 cigarettes these all factors to have clear and nice
air
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 my thesis cost
of
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that
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 the of fuel doesn't fix the
nature
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natural
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 issues.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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task achievement
Try to further clarify your ideas by avoiding repetition and ensuring each point is distinct and well-explained.
coherence cohesion
You have included both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps in structuring your essay.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt by discussing alternative solutions to increasing fuel costs, such as using electric cars and planting trees.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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