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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preference to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 think working in a big company is important because there are more opportunities, Other
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perfer
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prefer
 small
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companies
 because they can have a better experience. Both ideas are interesting Working in a big company is good because there are more resources,
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, they can give better salaries insurance
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 and bonuses,
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people
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 other works and meet new
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people
peopel
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 feel like they are just a number in a big system But on
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hand
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 A small company is better because workers can do many different things and learn new skills. They feel closer to their team and feel more important But, small companies don't always have the same money or resources as big companies I think it depends on what
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 like. Big companies are
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good
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 for safety and growth, but small
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companies
 are better if you want to feel important. For
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me,
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 I prefer a small
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company
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company
 because I like working
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with
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 a small team
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coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You present a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which is essential for this task type.
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Your personal opinion is clearly stated and justified, which strengthens the response.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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