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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the process of developing
of
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an
area
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 between 1995 and the nowadays.
Overall
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, it can be observed that
majority
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the majority
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places
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of places
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 and areas
are
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have
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 changed from 1995 to the present.
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, the fishing port and farmland have been removed Looking at the maps in more detail in the 1995 year,there was
long
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a long
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 road ,which was
two
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on two
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 sides with installations. The northwest
area
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 contained
with
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houses,
the
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and the
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 shop was at the top of
houses
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the houses
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.Farmland and forest
park
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parks
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 were located in the northeast.
At the end
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 of the street
placed
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is
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hotel
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a hotel
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.
Fish
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The fish
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 market was situated southwest of
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area
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the area
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 ,on the right side of
market
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the market
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 was
small
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a small
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 café and a fishing port in the southern
area
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. In the present,a road has been built from the middle of the long road toward the west.
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,objects in the northeast changed to golf and tennis ,next to the hotel ,built car park zone.The compact café the same.Buildings in the south corner
modified
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to
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into
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 and apartments.Fishing port is
knock
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knocked
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 down from the sea.
As a
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result
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result,
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 the fish is not delivered to the city.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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