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Some people believe that one on one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are more effective.

#people #lessons #group
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Individual
lessons
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 are more effective than
group
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 learning. I partially agree with
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 statement,
although
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 individual lesson has
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 impact on effectiveness,
group
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 classes can be
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 interesting period. On the one hand, being
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 individual classes has its own benefits. The major advantage is that
,
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 it will increase the speed and the quality of study. Because,
while
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 teachers and tutors teach
single
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 person, they will give all their attention to that pupil, which can lead to
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 the student’s level of understanding.
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, learning English in
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classes
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 may give
students
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 to communicate with their teachers more in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 which will give higher results during
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 learning process. If individual
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 are not encouraged, the deadline
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 learning any subject will be extended
due to
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 the number of learners in a classroom.
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However
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this
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 kind of practice can be
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boring for
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 because they will not have partners.
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, studying with
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 mates is
more
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a more
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 interesting process. The reason is that in
group
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lessons
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students
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 will have more opportunities to
hangout
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 with others and play
group
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 games with each other which makes learning progress more enjoyable. To give
in
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 example, at schools, teachers are trying to make several games for pupils in order to make the process of learning easier and enjoyable. They usually make competition games for which
students
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 can receive even several prizes for winning.
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, despite
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lessons
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 are bit boring it has a huge potential in order to learn the subject
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group
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 learning
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 more interesting.
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Work on ensuring that each paragraph clearly supports your main argument. While your paragraphs are distinct, they need more evidence to effectively support your point about the benefits of individual and group lessons.
task
The essay should be more closely aligned with the topic. While relevant points are addressed, ensure both sides of the argument are examined evenly.
support
Include more detailed examples to strengthen your points. This will aid in providing a more comprehensive argument.
structure
Good structure with a clear introduction setting up your position on the topic.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the argument presented in the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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