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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS
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The bar chart given illustrates the proportion of
people
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 that used different
amount
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amounts
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 of social
netwroking
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networking
sites
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 in Canada which are:No
sites
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,
One
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site
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,
Two
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sites
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,Three
sites
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,Four
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,and Five
sites
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 in
two
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 years, 2014 and 2015.
Overall
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, there is a downward trend in the bar chart given, and the
people
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 in Canada used no
sites
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 or
one
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site
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 mostly in 2014,where 22% of
people
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 didn't
use
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 any
sites
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,and 36% used only
one
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site
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, compared to 2015 where 21% of
people
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 didn't
use
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 any
sites
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while
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 28% of
people
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 used
one
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site
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.
However
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, more
people
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use
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used
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two
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sites
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 in 2015 compared to 2014. Where 24% used
two
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sites
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 of social
network
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networks
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,
in contrast
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 to 23% of
people
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used
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who used
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two
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sites
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 in 2014. The downward trend starts when
people
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used
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use
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 three
sites
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 or more.We can conclude that
less
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fewer
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people
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use
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 more than
two
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sites
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 as only 12%
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use
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used
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 three
sites
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 in 2014, and 16% in 2015, compared to the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who used
two
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sites
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 for both years.
Moreover
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, 5% only
uses
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used
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 four
sites
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 in 2014
while
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 8% in 2015.
Furthermore
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, the downward trend
continous
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continues
 with 2% only
uses
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using
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 five
sites
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 in 2014
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while
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and
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 4% in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sites, one, site, two, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 3 times.
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