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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

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Urbanization has made air pollution and traffic
jam
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the
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 concern
to
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 most countries.
while
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 governments incline the price of
fuel
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 to tackle
this
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 struggle,
i
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 believe raising petrol price will do more harm than
goods
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good
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, as some countries
relay
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rely
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 on petrol for
majority
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the majority
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 of activities.
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, taxation on
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fuel consuming
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fuel-consuming
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 will be more effective.
To begin
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 with,
fuel
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are
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is
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 the main source of energy in most developing countries,
use
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used
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 to produce electricity, cooking, generator usage and many more
activites
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activities
such
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 as pumping water from
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the bolehole
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bolehole
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borehole
boreholes
bolthole
.
therefore
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, increasing
fuel
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 prices could affect the
country
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country's
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 economy and
also
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inconvience
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inconvenience
 the
populations
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population
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. as people with less income would not be able to afford that.
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, other methods
such
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 as heavy tax on
fuel
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 emission
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and providing enough public transportation system can far
decline
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reduce
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 the rate of traffic congestion and promote
usage
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the usage
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 of electric means of transport. if governments equip efficient public transport and metro means to be fast and frequent,
majority
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the majority
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 of individuals will rather use public transport than
to
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apply
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struggle
the
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with the
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 need
of driving
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to drive
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. In conclusion,
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a raise
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raise
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rise
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 in
fuel
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price
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prices
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 could handle the rates at which
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fuel emission
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fuel-emission
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 are used, but the challenges that
accompanied
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this
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less
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 comfortable for
the
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apply
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individuals, and will economically affect the country.

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Task Achievement
The essay addresses both aspects of the task by discussing the impact of raising fuel prices and proposing alternative measures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The use of paragraphs helps separate different ideas and arguments, which is a positive aspect of coherence.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel efficiency
  • hybrid vehicles
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • emissions
  • inflation
  • economic impact
  • remote work
  • flexible hours
  • infrastructure
  • non-polluting
  • congestion charges
  • carpooling
  • commute
  • carbon footprint
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