The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps present how the

school

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layout in 2024 and the plan for changes

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site.

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, The

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layout will expand from

small

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area to

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the

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big area, and they plan to

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many

student

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1000

peoples

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. As we can see, in those maps they will add another

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building, there are will 3

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buldings

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sport

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field, and the

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field will be moving

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the north of new

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building.

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buildings 1 and 2 will

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the walking path between them

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to make a new

car

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park

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on the right side of

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building 3, and

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, build a new road that can connect

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park

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1 and

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2, the road line from the old

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one, main entrance and through the new builds

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

150 words

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