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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the figure of students at university in male and female subjects during 3 years ago.
Overall
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, as can be
seen
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 social sciences had a significant figure
while
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,
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 languages had the lowest point. It is clear from the graph that, in female part of the social sciences received a higher number around under 25 .
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, in Languages , Humanities and arts decreased gradually from 16 to 9 per cent.
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, the rest of
subjects
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 had
fracture
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 from 4 to 11 points.
On the other hand
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, in male
portions
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 had a higher figure in sciences around 22
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, the Loss number in Languages was nearly 1 point. Other subjects had
fracture
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 from 17 to 1 Point.
However
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, In
humanities
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humanities,
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 both genders
are
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have
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 a similar percentage nearly 11 total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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