You are moving to a new country to go to university and will need a part - time job . You have a friend who lives in that country . Write a letter to your friend . In your letter , apologise for not staying in touch explain why you're moving to this country ask your friend if he / she can help you find a job .

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Dear Ron, I

fell

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terrible about not being in contact more often. I'm sorry for not keeping in touch as much as I'd like to tell you that I'm thrilled to be moving

Toronto

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, Canada for my

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academic curriculum. Could I ask a favour from you to help me find a part-time job ? I think you might be furious for not contacting you.

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know you might be wondering what in the world had been happening that didn't allow me to connect. I was not only swamped with my professional commitments towards my job

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but

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caught up applying for

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year's summer intake courses . I am really sorry, and I could make it up with

treat

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from my end when we meet next month. To brief you

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reason for my relocation,I have enrolled for the course Artifical

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University

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of Toronto and it is one of the best

program

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offered by them. I wouldn't want to miss

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exciting learning opportunity.

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I'll be attending my lectures during

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first half of the day,the remaining time I am looking to work so that I

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earn a side income to get my daily expenses covered

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I could use

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chance to make some new friends in the city. I hope I am not asking for too much, but if you refer me to any of the places that

accpeting

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accepting

part-time applications, it would be of

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help for me to

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well in the city. We will catch up soon, I owe you a treat. Warm Regards

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logical structure

Improve the logical flow by transitioning more smoothly between apologizing for not being in touch, explaining the move, and asking for job help.

single idea per paragraph

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity and cohesion.

suitable writing tone

The letter is warm and friendly, which is suitable for writing to a friend and maintains an appropriate tone throughout.

greeting and closing

Clear greeting at the beginning and closing at the end of the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

268 words

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Apologize for not staying in touch: 'I feel terrible about not being in contact more often...', 'I'm sorry for not keeping in touch as much as I'd like to...'.
Moving: 'I'm thrilled to be moving to...', 'I've been given an amazing opportunity to study at...', 'I am on the brink of starting a new chapter in...'.
Part-time job: 'I am hoping to find a part-time job...', 'It would be great if you could help me with finding...', 'I am eager to work and gain some experience...'.
Study and university: 'I will be joining...', 'I have enrolled in...', 'My course will be...'.
Requesting assistance: 'Do you think you could help me out with...', 'Would you mind giving me some guidance about...', 'Could you keep an eye out for...'.

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