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The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories

The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories
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The pie charts illustrate the amount of the trend in using water in six regions all over the world in
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 of three categories.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Agricultural
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 is the highest rate in four different areas. At the same time, the percentages in Europe and North America are opposite that.
To begin
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 with, Africa and Central Asia scored 84% and 88% of Agricultural
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 in their numbers. With a small proportion for other parts.
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, South East Asia was similar for the
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 two statistics. Used were 81% for the blue section. Only 7% for the red piece.
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, 12% for the orange department.
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, Europe and North America had simulation rates in their figures. By advantage for industrial
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 section by about half of
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. The
last
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 one is South America. They used 71 per cent of water Agriculturally.
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, 19% was for Domestic
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. and 10% for industrial water
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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