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Nowadays many people chose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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ourdays
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 many people prefer to work alone
instead
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 of for employers.
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 could be a result of the
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stability
 of the
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salary
,
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,
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self employed
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self-employed
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 could have
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detrimental
 effects,
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 as overloading and
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insecurity
. The
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unchanged
 incomes might be a good reason to be
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self-employed
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. People who carry on at the same position and
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 the same
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salary
 over
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 can be considered
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a waste of time and
efforts
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. Working alone with their
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potential
 and experience would
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significantly
 increase their incomes,
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, they
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will
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be satisfy
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 with their accomplishments because they
acheive
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achieve
 their needs and get what they deserve.
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,
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a vast
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 of
employes
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employees
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requesting
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 for
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internship
 promotion but
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do not get it ,
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 , when they start their own project, they get more than they asked before. Relatively,
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self employed
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self-employed
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 has several disadvantages. People who work alone place undue stress on them,
due to
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 the great
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responsibilities
, they rather hold
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everything
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 in the work and they must take the
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control
 and manage it , they
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may
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 have to deal with
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substantial
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problems
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 that could face the business.
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,
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prominent
 companies could be supportive,
thus
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 might lose their backups. When working issues
emarge
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emerge
, they can head to their manager to solve them, they won't be
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extremely
worry
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 about these problems.
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 instance, in many cases,
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self employed's
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self-employed's
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 projects tend to fail
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because
 of the overload and
chalenges
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challenges
 that they face. In conclusion, working alone
happen
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 because of the
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stable
 income,
also
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 it could be
harm
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harmful
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 during the huge stress and
lake
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lack
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 of support.
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