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It is often argued that it is difficult to get children to read. Why do you think this is? What measures could be taken to encourage children to read more? Give reasons for your answer and any include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The debate regards
decreasing
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interest
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 of
children
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 in reading has been a long
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. well, one cannot deny the fact that nowadays
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children
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children's
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 ability to read across the globe has
decline
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, and
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 could be
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 distractions and
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lack
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a lack
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 of
interest
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the topic
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.
therefore
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,
there
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 can
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 by
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addressing
 these issues. There are various reasons that could cause
unwilliness
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unwillingness
 to read among
children
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, but the two main factors are Distractions and
lack
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 of
interest
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the
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 particular topic. Recently, technology has been a major source of divided attention in
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,
becasue
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because
 nowadays, 8 in every 10
children
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 spend most of
time
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their time
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 on social media rather than studying, and
this
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 frequent usage could lead to
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lack
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a lack
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 of time to read.
secondly
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, some
children
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 may not want to read
due to
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lack
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 of
interest
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 in the is provided to read. An example of that
,
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apply
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 is providing a child with books or
topic
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topics
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 related to politics
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 of their area of
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interest
.
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, most
children
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 are more
focus
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focused
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 on
excisting
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existing
exciting
 topics rather than factual
contents
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content
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 and news. On the other
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hand
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, measures
such
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 as
inclusion
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the inclusion
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 of diagrams and creating
a conducive environments
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a conducive environment
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 could be
an
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effective methods to handle
this
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 situation. It is important to supply
children
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 with comfortable and
children
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-friendly surroundings.
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, peer groups with calm paintings
such
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 as, pink and blue which often gives them
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a sense
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 of safety.
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subsequently
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, illustrations of some complicated writings can motivate and encourage them to read. In conclusion, some possible reasons
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sudden
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the sudden
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 decline
of
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in
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interest
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 in reading witnessed in
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 could be
due to
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diversion
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the diversion
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 of
attentions
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attention
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as well as
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 boring topics to read. But, these can be solved with the right resources provided.
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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your essay more logically. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and is connected logically to the next.
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Each main point should be developed with clear explanations, examples, or evidence to make your argument stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your introduction clearly states what the essay will be about and your conclusion summarizes the main points effectively.
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You have effectively identified and discussed the main reasons children are reluctant to read.
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You have suggested several solutions to encourage reading among children.

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