The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the mode of
transportations
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transportation
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( walk, bicycle, car, and bus) utilized by
the
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UK students aged 11 -16 in a certain year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most of the UK students with short
distance
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from the school prefer to walk,
whereas
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, buses were more popular to those who lived in a
distance
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. In detail, walking was more popular among pupils with 0-1
miles
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distance
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from the school, approximately 80%. Meanwhile,
bicycle
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bicycles
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were widely used as a mode of transportation with a
distance
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of 1-2
miles
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.
In contrast
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,
traveling
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travelling
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by car was less popular among the UK children at about 30% in 2-5 over
miles
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. Looking more at the graph, most of the students who lived over 5
miles
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used
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buses to travel
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to school, about less than 75%,
while
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50% with a
distance
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of 2-5 and less than 10% of the children used bicycle and chose to walk.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modes of transportation
  • Percentage
  • Comparative analysis
  • Seasonal variations
  • External factors
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Non-motorized modes
  • Safety
  • Convenience
  • Sustainable
  • Initiatives
  • Promoting
  • Improvements
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