The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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This
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data provides information about the
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of individuals who participated in different hobbies at a social
center
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located in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
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, some activities kept a steady rate
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others increased or decreased
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each activity kept a different size of popularity. Martial arts and Film
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kept a steady rate with only slight fluctuations, with film club being the most popular hobby in general at around 60 participants and Martial arts being the second most preferred activity at around 35 individuals, But lost its place in 2015
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the rise of table tennis. Beginning in 2000, Table tennis kept an average
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of around 15 to 20 people.
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, in 2010 a huge increase was noted and reached almost 60 participants in 2020. The same trend can be applied to Musical performances, Starting in 2005 the
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of people who picked up
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hobby slowly increased and reached around 20 musicians in 2020. A different story can be told for Amature dramatics, starting with around 25 people in 2000 and reaching the highest
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of participants in 2005 at almost 30,
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hobby started to decline
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significantly
throughout the years reaching around 5 individuals only in 2020.
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