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The table below shows the employment of students from four counries in the UK after their first courses in 2001.

The table below shows the employment of students from four counries in the UK after their first courses in 2001.
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The given table compares data about the percentage of students who worked after their first courses in four various areas of the UK namely,
Scotland
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,
England
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,
Wales
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, and Northern
Ireland
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 in 2001.
Overall
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, it was important that the proportion of permanent
employment
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 was more than other sections;
additionally
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,
Scotland
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 had more portion than others.
According to
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 the diagram, permanent
employment
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, the main section that had the highest fraction in 2001 of students, Formed 43.6% of
Scotland
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, roughly one-third of
England
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, 30% of
Wales
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, and one-fifth of Northern
Ireland
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.
However
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, the order for Temporary
employment
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 was different from the prior factor owing to the fact that it made up 23% of
England
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, 20.2% of
Scotland
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, 12.4% of
Wales
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 and the
last
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 one the same as the previous sector was Northern
Ireland
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 with 8.6%. The graph demonstrates that for overseas
employment
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 Northern
Ireland
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 composed the maximum portion at 5%;
thereafter
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,
Wales
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,
Scotland
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, and
England
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 constituted 2.9, 2.6, and 2.3 per cent. Total
employment
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 had the same order as permanent inasmuch as
Scotland
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,
England
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,
Wales
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, and Northern
Ireland
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 respectively reported 66.4%, 58.3%, 45.3% and 33.6%.

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