The table shows information about department stores and online stores in Australia in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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provides data related to the economic activity of two Correct your spelling
chart
type
of stores in Australia in 2011.
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types
Overall
, is noticeable that, in general, online shops were more successful than Linking Words
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not a big deal.
As can be seen in the table there is a huge difference between both commerces, being the online stores 5 times more than the department ones. Correct pronoun usage
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Consequently
, the growth trend is smaller in Linking Words
traditionals
up to 4% annually, 2% less than the others. Correct your spelling
traditional
However
, the profit obtained during that year did not differ that much, the non-conventional businesses raising up to 807 AUD, Linking Words
while
websites made slightly more, 863 AUD in total. Linking Words
Lastly
, looking at the sales revenue is appreciated that the variation from one to the other is just 700 AUD, where the online shops were those who achieved the most.
To summarize, is crystal clear that even people preferred shopping on websites rather than in physical stores, the money raised from both of them does not differ that much, Linking Words
impliying
that both were essential in 2011.Correct your spelling
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