The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The figure illustrates information about the variety of changes that happened at

west park

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West Park

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secondary schools since it was

stablished

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established

in 1950.

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, at first glance, it becomes clear that the site

had

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changed dramatically over 60 years.

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some facilities

such

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as the

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school

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school's

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main building and the playground

remaind

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remained

remains

remain

steadily, various facilities

had been

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were

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removed or

stablished

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established

during the period shown.

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with, in 1950, the site contained

from

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four significant facilities including,

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school

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a school

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building, houses,

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a farmand

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farmand

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farms

and

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a playground

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playground

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playgrounds

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apply

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the

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apply

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three

decade

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later,

although

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the playground and the

school

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building remained unchanged, the farmland changed

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into

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the

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sports field and the residentional area

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was devided

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devided

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divided

into two sectors including

car

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a car

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park and

the

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science block. It is noticeable that the main road remained

steadily

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during

this

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period.

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, in 2010,

while

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the size of the

playgroung

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playground

was reduced, the

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school

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school's

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main building and the science block stayed

fix

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fixed

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, the most significant part of the area was taken

palce

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place

by the car park and

also

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the

sport

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field had reduced in size, decreasing almost to half in size.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

initially
subsequently
transformation
expansion
reduction
relocation
layout
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