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The table chart below illustrates the percentage of school children attend of four groups in secondary school from 2000 to 2009.

The table chart below illustrates the percentage of school children attend of four groups in secondary school from 2000 to 2009.
The table shows the data about students’ attendance rates in
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, Grammar, Voluntary-controlled and
Community
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Schools
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 during the observation period from 2000 to 2009. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the highest percentage can be found in Voluntary-controlled
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 in 2000 and
Community
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Schools
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 in 2009, which are 52% and 58% respectively.
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 means over half of the pupils went to these two institutions.
According to
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 the chart, the largest percentage of 2000-year students belonged to Voluntary-controlled
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, and in contrast,
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 and
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Schools
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 both took the smallest proportion of all, which was 12% for each. In 2005, Voluntary-controlled
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 had a slight drop off to 38% but still occupied most of the kids. Following was the
Community
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Schools
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, less about 6%. The proportion of
Specialist
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Schools
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 and Grammar
Schools
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 were similar which were 11% and 19%.
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 but not least,
Community
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Schools
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 took the first place with 58% and
Specialist
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Schools
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 had the least amount for them.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words specialist, community, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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