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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent

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The line graph shows the changing pattern of
visitors
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 to a specific Caribbean
island
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 during 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, an
increase
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increased
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 trend could be
saw
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seen
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 in both the group of
visitors
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 who prefer to stay on cruise ships and those who choose to stay on
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island
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the island
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.
While
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 the former group started with a higher base number of about 0.75
million
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visitors
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 in 2010, the latter reversed
this
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 situation with around 1.5
million
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 supporters in 2017. Look into more detail, the number of cruise ship voters stayed stable at 0.75
million
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 from 2010 before underwent a steady increase from 2011 to about 1.5
million
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 in 2013. The figure did not change until a marginal decrease between 2015 and 2016, and
finally
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 bounced back to 1.5
million
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 again by 2017.
On the other hand
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, the number of
visitors
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 who preferred to stay on
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island
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the island
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 was only 0.25
million
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 in 2010. After it rose slightly and dropped back to the initial figure in 2012,
island
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 stayers soared to 2
million
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 by 2017, surpassing the figure for
the
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cruise ship fans in the second half of 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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