The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011

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The presented line graph represents the percentage of individuals of different ages watching films in cinemas between 2000 and 2011 in one European nation. In general, it is conspicuous that the

cinemas'

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consumers increased in all categories. Turning to the top two audiences, the people aged 15-24 were the highest number of

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cinema ticket buyers, starting at just above 10% and reaching a peak

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than

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half.

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, there is a gradual increase in the second category having 15-24 years old in ten years,

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, it declined

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the end of the period at 20%. The rest of

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the categories

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presents

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the total proportion of movie theatre visitors

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age

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25-35 years old

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in the time

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frame and hit the highest level in 2011.

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, the statistics reported that the

cinema

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number of cinema

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audiencers

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audiences

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aged over 35 who visited it once a month or more rose gradually from a small fraction to 10% .

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cinema-going
Attendance
Frequency
Demographics
Trends
Percentage
Fluctuations
Technological advancements
Streaming services
Leisure activity
Data analysis
Decrease/increase
Age groups: Teenagers, Young adults, Middle-aged, Seniors
Periodic comparison
Socioeconomic factors

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The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Difference between countries become less evident each year.Nowadays all the over world, people share the same fashions, advertising,brands,eating habits, Tv channels. Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage.

In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass and cans). What are the reasons and solutions?

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages.