It is now possible to order almost any item over the Internet and have it delivered to one’s home. As a result, people are no longer patient or careful in their shopping habits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Online purchasing through the
internet
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and shipping to the destination leads to bad shopping habits.
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some argue online shopping leads to impatience, I believe it offers significant benefits in terms of convenience and competitive pricing. One of the primary advantages of online shopping is the convenience it offers through mobile applications.
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of visiting the store, people prefer to order through an online application because it's simple and effortless.
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, to buy clothes, people only open an application
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as Amazon, insert it into the cart and pay using the card which has been saved in the system.
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, the buyer just waits for the item to be delivered to the address .
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, the company
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provides
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delivery guarantees and date estimation of delivery, and when the item arrives,
customers
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get
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on the applications. Another significant benefit of online shops is the ability to find competitive prices. It is because
customers
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are able to compare the prices to the other stores,
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result
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buyers tend to check out the cheapest items.
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in
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special
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events
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such
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as cyber
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and flash
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sales
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, the online store offers a discount to attract
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buyers.
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in the cyber
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session, the prices
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a half and sometimes additional
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cashback
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from the payment providers.
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, shopping online has been a common trend for
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customers
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. In conclusion,
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some may argue that online shopping has drawbacks, its convenience and competitive pricing make it a valuable option for
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task response
Try to incorporate some discussion on how online shopping might affect the traditional patience and carefulness in shopping, as the prompt suggests. This will help your argument appear more holistic.
task response
Ensure that your argument is explicit at the start; clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement provided.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your ideas transition smoothly between paragraphs to enhance overall coherence.
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The essay effectively uses clear examples like Amazon and Cyber Monday to illustrate its points.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes the main points, providing a good wrap-up to the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay is generally well-structured, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of online shopping.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • impulsive
  • hasty
  • physical interaction
  • careful consideration
  • informed decisions
  • reviews
  • ratings
  • patient
  • online shopping habits
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